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Icy Balm  Open in new Window. [18+]
A punishment leads to passion and the first hint of forgiveness for sins more grievous.
by Mara ♣ McBain Author Icon
Review of Icy Balm  Open in new Window.
Review by dblameck (David) Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Review of Icy Balm

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review was done as part of the Game of Thrones competition.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

In choosing which stories to review I read several but perhaps seemed to gravitate to those with a BDSM theme particularly with a spanking emphasis. So perhaps while I am reviewing your story it rather feeds my own perverted feeling and desires. So right up front let me thank you for meeting my needs with your story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

As many erotic stories the character list is usually limited to two person who are actually lovers. I enjoyed the way you presented each of these characters.

Shane is the dominant personality and controls the submissive Michaela and brings her out of her self in order to express her sexuality. He uses spanks and pain interspersed with application of an icecube. He heat the body and then cools it. Actually it is my experience that reheating an iced portion of tender flesh can be very dynamic. Shane is of course the dom and he controls how much impulse she experiences.

Michaela is a submissive who says she does not enjoy the punishment but like the line from Shakespear I think she protests too much and gives her desires away.

The interaction of these characters is exceptional and I definitely enjoyed how you wove their sexual activities into a basket of lust and passion.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I like the story the way that is it.


FINAL THOUGHTS:

Please share some new stories with all of us. Of course you could bring back your contest too.

dblameck





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