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 There is no Prince Charming . . . Open in new Window. [ASR]
What If... (Watching romantic movies - Relationship problems - Unrealistic expectations)
by ruwth Author Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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*NoteV* What worked ~
Emotional piece about abuse, not an easy thing to write about so kudos to you for going for it. Movies have a tendency to portray the happily every after, which isn't always a bad thing. But it gives us expectations of what our romantic lives should entail, which makes relationships even more difficult sometimes. It's difficult for people in abusive situations to not blame themselves for the actions of their abusers. I was glad to see that you pointed that out, and had your main character reassure herself that she wasn't at fault.
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*NoteG* What didn't ~
There is an inconsistency with where she is. The story begins with her in the bathroom, but it's never clear she's left there until she's out of the house. There are moments where you can add to the physical and emotional pain of your main character, why she decides that today is the day she is standing up for herself. Giving your main character a name makes a connection with your reader.

*NoteV* Impressions ~
I liked the new rules your main character impressed upon herself for future relationships, never a bad thing in my opinion. She had the strength to walk out, to see the way things were going, what she wanted, and what she didn't. As for Prince Charming, I think our perception of him could be changed. Write on!


"Game of Thrones"  Open in new Window. by Creeper Of The Realm Author Icon

House Greyjoy image for G.o.T.

This would be my name.
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