Hello Kerri J Miller!

Oh man, I'm raiding your port. You meet this wild and crazy person on scroll and they come to find you in your writing territory. Of course, this is just playful humor, and I decided to first start hunting in your poetry folder. Why? I'm a glutton for some poetry. This style of writing packs a punch in a few words, which to me, makes it a fun and interesting challenge. This poem of yours grabbed my attention from the get go.

Below is my review of your item beginning with Corrections:

Corrections/Suggestions
The only thing I have to suggest is maybe breaking your poem into one than just the one stanza based on the imagery you presented. Like this for example:

Distorted visions across the panes;
Water spattered across the mud,
Displaced into new patterns,
Likewise to green in shapes,

My eyes embrace it with a hug,
Like it really does matter,
Much water seeps into the day

Bur, that's more of a personal preface thing and completely up to you.

Rhythm/Rhyming
I thought the rhythm of your poem was well placed and done. Every image moved smoothly to the next, adding more to the image and to your poem. Nothing felt 'forced' which is a really good thing because it can be in certain poems.

My Favorite Line(s)
Distorted visions across the panes;
Water spattered across the mud,
Displaced into new patterns,-

I really like this above line, though this was just one and it was hard to pick my favorite lines.

Things Which I Enjoyed
I love nature poems and how the imagery of the rain, the stream, how it flows and rejuvenates the land underneath it. I liked how you had that one line that "this is surely better than snow," that made me smile. How your eyes embrace it with a hug, that was a really great visual and description.

Overall Comments
Overall, I'm glad I decided to do a little raid! You'll see me poking around here more and I didn't have too much to add or suggest besides breaking into separate stanzas. I feel like that gives the reader time to soak in the imagery at different points where it seems to move to a different spot. The 'flow' was quite good and this really does bring about a beauty to watching rain. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D

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