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 A Darker Shade of the Sweetest Blue Open in new Window. [E]
A little note on depression.
by Elisha Henley Author Icon
Review by Nixie🦊 Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I found it easy to relate to your poem and liked the unusual method, naming a color to demonstrate depression. The poem began on a positive note, but after the second stanza, the reader understands that blue is not a positive color for some. Because I suffer from depression, I knew from the first stanza, and because you included the word in your brief description the poem would be dark.

Your unique choice of words stood out and saved the work from being mundane. The two foremost in my mind were "eclectic emotions" and "vapid as hell".

A fascinating observation--no one can bring us from the depths, and we're possessive of our misery.

Even though the topic is gloomy, your talent shines through. The more I read it, the more I liked it. You have a solid grip on depression, and for that I am sorry. Sometimes I think we write our best when we're gloomy. I guess what stands out in the end is how depression was shown to be undesirable, yet in some ways, coveted by the person.

Depression keeps us immobile, and we can't even reach out for help. Just lay silent until the episode releases us. My bouts generally last from three to four days before I level out. People have clinical depressions, and situational depressions. If an event is too much to bear, the depression lingers. But clinical has no trigger. It just is.

People don't transition until staying in one place is harder than moving forward. And then we act. Your final stanza captured my attention. It's interesting to think of loving ourselves when we're down. I'd say that's pretty amazing and enlightening. I'll try to remember that next time.

My only stumbling point was the first line in the second stanza. Capitalizing beauty threw me off, but maybe you wanted to reinforce the contrast. And it felt as if "the wonderful beauty" would work better than "a wonderful beauty". A small observation, from one reader. As always, the writer is the final authority.

Keep writing!

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