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Remember I am not a professional reviewer. These are just my personal impressions and thoughts. My goal is to be encouraging and give you something that will actually help your writing.

First Impressions:

I liked this a lot. I thought the comedy was handled deftly and the writing was good throughout. There was enough curiosity in the first sentence to keep me reading. From there you went right into the action. I think that was a good thing. I don't think the story was rushed or abrupt at all. Maybe the word count forced you to tighten the writing. I didn't notice. Granted I've not read your other writing... yet.

My Favorite Elements:

The humour. This type of comedy can get dragged out and wear thin. It can also be too over the top. You avoided both issue. I thought you had it just about perfect.

Suggestions:

If there were grammar issues, it was outside my realm of minimal expertise. Well done. I don't think you need to fix anything.

Overall:

Great job. I enjoyed the story and when I have time I may peruse a few more that you've written. Keep it up.

Keep on writing!

Pico

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