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 Hi HorroMovieGeek! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!  The title is evocactive and the poem makes me think of an adult who has angar issues or addiction issues perhaps and over reacts. You have captured the boy's fear, anger and guilt perfectly and in a realistic way. I think those reactions are normal in the situation. The poem is tightly woven with intense emotion. The imagery is so clear and the metaphor of "demon" gives me the idea that the father may be very strict or perhaps have drinking issue as I know some folks change personalities when drinking and that can confuse kids. The love-hate feeling of kids with parents is part of growing up as well. You attracted by attention in the first line with the "growl". Reminded me of my brother's relationship with my dad--we did not have the belt but my dad was always criticizing him--I think because he saw himself in my brother and wanted to change him.. Both were very stubborn. My brother would clench up and go off. I haven't thought of that in a long time.  I certainly don't like the sound of the belt. I like how you take me through the changing viewpoint of the boy. His confusion is also natural. Good tone. I really appreciate your sharing this story with its psychological edge. It really made an impact and I feel for the boy.  Keep on writing!Light on the path as you write on! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!"  .
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You responded to this review 05/21/2016 @ 1:10pm EDT