This is a review from "Simply Positive Review Forum " 

Remember I am not a professional reviewer. These are just my personal impressions and thoughts. My goal is to be encouraging and give you something that will actually help your writing.

First Impressions:

I've been mulling this one over in my head for several days. It's well written and it's taken me some time to figure out what I would elect to nitpick. There is a lot to like here and I did find it entertaining.

My Favorite Elements:

For the reader this is questions and mystery from beginning to end. I liked that. Your hook was at the beginning and held my interest right through.

Suggestions:

How's this for a nitpick. I didn't like the text formatting. I like a space between paragraphs or at least an indent. I really do find it distracting and I've talked to other writers who have a similar reaction. For me fixing that would make it easier to read.

Overall:

This is good writing and good storytelling. It is well written and entertaining. Good job!

Keep on writing!

Pico

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