Review number # 9

Hi GerMac, looks to me like you shortened your first and your last name here, cool!

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Sea Moods


First Impression: I was crediting the reviews for Simply Positive and read Cinn 's review and was curious. I am very glad I came.

What I liked: I love the surreal feeling you created, it did make me feel like I was walking a long the shore. You must not be in Jersey, every time I've been there are so many seagulls hovering and squawking.

What needs your attention: I'm not sure why you capitalized each line because it's not really necessary to in poetry. It didn't take away as I read, I am only asking as poet to poet and my incessant curiosity.

Favorite Parts: I was impressed with the word choices they flowed smoothly creating a surreal feeling and image. Lucid blue and foamy spouts are awesome images. I chuckled as I read sunbeams laugh, just as I do when the icy cold water tickles my toes and scurries back.

Overall Impression: There is no doubt in mind that you are a sea worshiper like me, the feel of your poem shows love and respect of its power.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my IMMENSE pleasure! Welcome to WDC, I hope to see more of your work.
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .