Review number # 8

Hi Rhyssa

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: For Rachel, again


First Impression: A child doesn't notice these things until he is older and the bond between them is secure. Curious yes, but the love exists deeply between as it should be.

What I liked: My heart broke feeling the narrator's sadness sharing what the boy she thinks the boy will see.

What needs your attention: Nothing, it is beautiful as is.

Favorite Parts: All the things she still does, playing piano and driving a car. I wish I could do either one but that wasn't my fate. Yes, there are things we all miss and we learn to adapt just as your narrator has. For me, not being able to drive with my blackouts, now I get to be Miss Daisy and I do it in grand style if I do say so .

Overall Impression: Beautifully told, Rhyssa. I am going to miss reading your poems, see you the next round.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .