Hi Cubby ,

I chose to review your poem today as part of my reviewing requirement at "a very Wodehouse challenge" 

First impression and form:

This is a great children's rhyme you've written.

Your choice of words are appropriate to your target audience, and the simple use of rhyming couplets would appeal to children

General impressions:

Your poem reminds me of the Ten Little Indian Boys nursery rhyme, and is actually probably more appropriate for the politically correct world that we now live in.

Your poem has a smooth flow to it, and I like that you haven't tried to do anything too fancy with it.

Images:

I like the picture you have chosen for your cover image. At first I thought this was just a random image depicting cars. Your image suddenly made sense when I read your eighth stanza, and it made me chuckle.

The emoticon image you've come up with at the head of the poem is a nice touch. The line of ten cars fits in nicely with the countdown theme of your poem. It's a little freaky seeing how the line of ten cars is about the same length as your title

Closing remarks:

If you haven't already, you should give some serious thought to entering this in Caitie's Littlest Poetry Contest!

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~hating university


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