Hi Stephen Scorer ,



I chose to review your poem today as part of my reviewing requirement at "a very Wodehouse challenge" 

First impression:

This is the first poem I've ever read about race-track. You've done a great job of bringing the Leicester track to life

General impressions:

I like that you have included the names of all of the major features of Donington race track. People often memorise the names of features as they add something to their experience and enjoyment of the commentary of races. I enjoy horse racing commentary, especially from Aintree because of all the famous features mentioned such as Becher's Brook and Saint Valentine's Brook.

I also like the use of speed words in your poem such as "zoom", "whizz" and "fast" (especially the quick repetition of "fast" in the third stanza), all of which help to create a nice visual. It is easy to see an actual race occurring.

Suggestion:

You need to capitalise the names of the various track features. For example, you wrote "Wheatcroft straight", but it should be "Wheatcroft Straight", and "Melbourne hairpin" should be "Melbourne Hairpin".

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!

Andy~hating university


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