Review number # 3 of week May 12-May 18th

Hi Rhyssa,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Unpaid Line Editor

First Impression:
It is not easy doing the line-editing or to be on the receiving end to me. I've done both now and to me it is far worse having all the red lines, and squiggly marks appear on my work. Your poem reminded me of some memories not to far back when I was in college and Vic was proof-reading my papers for me before I turned them in. We finally agreed that it would never be before bedtime, so we could continue with never going to bed angry. I hated having my creativity stifled with rules and the discussions would become intense.
Probably why I enjoy poetry writing more than I do stories, I can get away with more.

What I liked: I chuckled when I came to
with eight pages.
she needs ten.
page by page,
paragraph by paragraph,
sentence by sentence,
word by misspelled word,

This has to be for a child, it's clearly a gift of love.

What needs your attention: Nothing, you wove a master of story telling.

Favorite Parts: The narrator sharing a memory with us as she helped someone special create a masterpiece giving up precious sleep.

Overall Impression: I think you and Vic can easily commiserate on sleep loss and line editing.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .