Review number # 2 of week May 12-18th

Hi Khariyya,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Amber Alert

First Impression: My initial instinct with the title was about a child being at risk but that illusion was quickly dismissed. I am very glad I do not have to pronounce the characters names out loud.

What I liked: I felt sorry for Jehoiada, having the stress of an arranged marriage and then for it to be a Priest's daughter to boot. That made me chuckle. The family appears to be in layers which is a bit confusing for me but I feel invested in the story that it would not deter me.

What needs your attention: I did not note anything punctuation or grammar errors. The only thing I found difficult and it is probably my being an older reader is the line spacing as it appears on my computer. It is challenging to read for a long period of time.

Favorite Parts: The conversation with Ima and her speaking about the twins. The sadness and raw emotions of having children with a serious disease were well written.
I find the name Amber unusual in comparison to all the other names even with Jael added to it. I am curious why you selected that name.

Overall Impression: I've read random chapters and have enjoyed each thus far. Excellent job! I think you have done a great job of telling a story about a young man faced with an arranged marriage when he would rather continue with things as they are. The second chapter introduced me to Amber, I sense she is going to have quite a role in the story. Hazi, I am disliking already, he has a cruel streak I don't find appealing. I am sure he will live up to my initial impression of him.
Congrats on your nomination for the Quills.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn