Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work. Happy WdC Anniversary this month

My first impression: This is an interesting take on the Seven Deadly Sins. That the narrator actually went looking for them is something that captured my attention.

Other thoughts:That the sins would paint a picture for someone is interesting. Luring someone with promises that can never really be fulfilled. I noticed that the narrator didn't care for all of the sins...such as Idleness was "too slow" to be of any draw to the narrator.

My favorite parts: I also liked that the narrator didn't just take the sin's promises at face value. Envy said that they'd take on the world...but the narrator thought "what for"? as that really wasn't all that appealing.

Some suggestions: I found no grammar issues or typos in your writing. This poem was well thought out and executed.

Overall: Even with all that the seven sins promised, it still wasn't enough to satisfy the narrator. Still a hole to be filled, perhaps with someone who shared a similar interest? Well done.


sincerely,

amyjo

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