** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to review your work. My first impression: The first thing that struck me when I looked at your poem, Virtue, was the opposite way you portrayed the seven virtues. The same number as the sins, but even the way you've laid out the poem...opposite side of the page. Other thoughts: When I look at both lists, I see how easy it would be to fall in the "middle" of either list, not completely virtuous, nor completely sinful. My favorite parts: Again, it is hard to choose a favorite. Each virtue has its own merit, and can stand alone. I think that the virtues are by far harder to achieve, as it is always easier to take the sinful path. The virtuous path is harder and takes more discipline, but the rewards are eminently better in the long run. Some suggestions: Once again, no typos or grammar issues. The flow of the verses was smooth. You've shown both sides of the argument in the sin/virtue behaviors. This was definitely well thought out and executed. Overall: I enjoyed reading both of your poems from beginning to end. I hope to snoop around your portfolio more in the future. Great Job! sincerely, ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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