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Review of A Halloween Tale  
Review by April Sunday
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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DEC 14, 2015

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Your story, A HALLOWEEN TALE could easily be re-titled to

"The Brainless Horseman of Shippley Wallow."

And what a tale you weave .. in Halloween mood, complete with stranger in a strange land, an eerie & foggy night setting ... all coupled with a waitress's apt warning.

One knows things shall heat up after,

"Perhaps I should have heeded her strange prompt to spend the night."

Instead, readers shall find rented wheels becoming stuck in the mud ..

Where a "mad" teenage girl does linger.

Very good. Winners up later tonight.
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Cordially, TEFF April Sunday

PS -- Dan, the turns of the phrases let me realize how well written this traditional short story delivers.
Like, e.g. "nocturnal chatter"
Like: the Texan poking fun at Yanks.

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