Hi boobus! Thanks for sharing this cute, funny story! MY INITIAL THOUGHTS I really like this story. It gives a new insight on what the monster under the bed is really up to! ● Character(s): Your characters, Calvin and the monster, are a riot! Such a clever idea. ● Storyline/Plot: I really enjoyed this storyline. It is quite hilarious - especially when the monster said he ate Calvin's sister: "I had a sister?" Priceless! ● Dialogue: This story being nothing BUT dialogue makes it remarkable. You've done a great job with this. MY FAVORITE PART(S): "Three years?” “Yeah, it’s been lean picking down here. Sometimes you drop a stuffed animal or maybe kick off a sock, but those are not very filling. I haven’t had a kid’s meal in 3 years.” “Who’d you eat?” “Do you remember your little sister, Lysa?” “No.” “Exactly. She wasn’t quick enough. Fell out of her crib and I snatched her.” “Oh my God! MOM! DAD!”" This had me laughing out loud! Hysterical! SUGGESTIONS: Only one thing that I found: "OK. You can have Bunny foo-foo. But that’s it!” IN CLOSING: Thanks again for sharing this clever story. I know your readers (maybe not children, lol) will love it as much as I did. I think you're a very good writer, and I hope to read more from you soon. Keep up the good work, & Keep Writing! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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