The Thing In The Cellar [18+] A young man's nightly routine is shattered. |
Hi Puckboy! Thanks for sharing this chilling story! MY INITIAL THOUGHTS This was a great read from beginning to end. I couldn't stop. This was most definitely a nail-biter. Very well-written. Kudos! ● Character(s): Your characters, the narrator, the cat, and the "thing" make for a very interesting story. ● Storyline/Plot: Your plot is seamless. I really enjoyed the entire story. The parts where the narrator could walk through his house in pitch darkness, yet still know where everything is, was quite believable - mout of us are the same. The cat, however...well it was quite funny when the narrator tripped over her as he realized he didn't know where everything was. ● Dialogue: The dialogue, of course, was via the narrator/main character alone, to his cat. I really liked how he went on his little rant about the cat being such a brat. That was cute, and it showed his true affection for the stray, as did his comment on the stairs. But I won't give too much away. MY FAVORITE PART(S): "I named her “Independence,” a suitable name more so because of her aloof nature than the date on which we met. I sometimes shorten that to “Indy,” maybe in reference to Indiana Jones, or maybe because she tears around my small house like a race car. I sometimes call her neither of these things, preferring instead to use whatever derogatory thing comes to mind first." This is such a sweet, sentimental insight into the cat's name. I love it. SUGGESTIONS: None that I could find. Perfect spelling, punctuation and grammar. Great job! IN CLOSING: Thanks again for sharing this edge-of-your-seat thriller. I know your readers will love it as much as I did. I think you're an excellent writer, and I hope to read more from you soon. Keep up the good work, & Keep Writing! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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