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*Flower4* Hi Elle! Thank you for sharing this precious poem! *Smile* *Flower4*


*Reading*MY INITIAL THOUGHTS*Reading*

This piece made me cry. Not because it was sad, but because of the sweet, sentimental memories you have of your sister, and what an amazing childhood you had. *Heart*

● Character(s):

Your words bring life to little Elle and your sister. I can tell how much you love her, just from this poem alone. *Smile*

● Storyline/Plot:

It sounds like the two of you had so many fun times and a huge variety of things to keep you occupied. I enjoyed such a childhood, living on somewhat of a farm, meaning we raised our own vegetables and livestock, but only for our own consumption. When I wasn't in the barn, I was out in the woods, exploring all by myself. I was a tomboy, and never had any fear of danger.

I loved the pigs and chickens, as well as the calf Daddy brought home one day. They were my playmates, being the last child at home, and it was quite disturbing when they kept coming up missing! *Facepalm* BUT my plate was always full! *Laugh*

● Dialogue:

There is no dialogue, but simply reading of all of the adventures that you two had needed no speaking - your words illustrated everything delightfully! *Stary*



*Heart* MY FAVORITE PART(S):*Heart*

"Dusty bike rides down gravel roads
to Tomarata Lake
for a swim with no parental supervision.
Carefree fun,
but you soon emerge with blue lips
and shivering limbs,
to bake under the summer sun." What a wonderful picture you have drawn. If I didn't know you were a Kiwi, I would swear you were raised in the South! *Smile*

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: *Idea*

None that I could find. Perfect spelling, punctuation and grammar. Great job! *Badge*


*Vine1*IN CLOSING: *Vine2*

Thanks again for sharing this amazing poem. It makes me want to relive childhood once more. I know your readers will enjoy this as much as I have. *Heart*

I think you're an excellent writer, and I hope to read more from you soon. Keep up the good work, & Keep Writing! *Pencil*


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