\"Writing.Com
*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4153257
Review #4153257
Viewing a review of: {citem:}
Review of  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: | (4.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Well, I was at the doctor's yesterday, so you could imagine why this stopped me as I was browsing around.

I think you did a very good job of capturing the emotions that go through people as they stand in that line. The sense of frustration at having an appointment yet still being made to sit around and wait rings a bell for me. Why do they even bother with appointments. God!

What I enjoyed most about this are the descriptions. They made me picture that white walled room quite clearly, you even called to mind the smell of antiseptic and the silent agony that people experience as they witness the little children rage in such a cramped location.

The line: "waiting in line to deny Death his prize" was my favorite. And I really liked the ending. Yup, even after seeing the doctor, the journey is just starting and the frustration is just warming up!

I quite enjoyed reading this. It is quite well written and has an interesting start, a quick flow, and a very realistic ending.

Many thanks for capturing this snapshot.

All the best,

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **



*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" Open in new Window..
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 09/06/2015 @ 9:06am EDT
Printed from https://writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4153257