Hi Robyn is PUBLISHED! and good afternoon. I'm Grateful Jess and I will be reviewing Porcelain Dolls. Please remember that these are only my opinions; feel free to take whichever you find the most helpful.

First Impressions:
I like the Kyrielle form -- I will have to try this form for some of my travel poetry. I also think the form works well with the imagery you are conveying. I also like the dark imagery of Porcelain Dolls.

Overall Thoughts:
Wow! This is really dark, but I love it.This poem is great when you're depressed because I think Porcelain Dolls is a good representation of what depression feels like. I also like the rhyme scheme - as I mentioned in First Impressions, I think the Kyrielle is the perfect form for this dark poem. It's not too sing-songy like a typical AABB poem. The Kyrielle form, unlike the typical AABB rhyming poem form, gives Porcelain Dolls a wonderful flow and breadth.

I don't think you should change a thing to this poem, however, it wouldn't hurt to go back and proofread to make sure you're conveying all you want to convey.

Rating:
***

Final Thoughts:
Wonderful poem, Robyn! Keep writing! ~Jessica

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .