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 | Bowl-a-Rama  [E] A Lento poem.  |
| (4.0)  Hiya Jace! This review is being given as part of the "Black Magic Birthday Review Bash" , presented by "The Dark Society"  I was drawn by the fun title and theme so it makes a great hook! As I read it I see it is an original and creative way to advertise an event at WDC!  I was also curious about the poem form as I had not heard of it.The image of friends who bowl together is vivid in the first verse and sets us up for the idea of community as you move into the second verse about a contest for reviewing. Well done in contrast and similarity!  The second verse has a distinct invitation to not miss out and the reasons to "run" there! Good show! Should "won" be "win" or to reflect the tense.The author's note about the form is handy and good to know. I think it would be better at the bottom of the item so your lovely crafting has top billing!  I see you have constructed the form effectively even to doing the bit of extra rhyme from verse 1 to 2. (though "reviews", "muse" has s sound that "you" and "too: do not. I just noticed it was a close match and maybe not intentional.It is impressive to have the first words of each line rhyme too. Wow! I especially enjoyed the first verse. It flowed smoothly but for the last line. The words "each week" seemed to slow it down. The second verse had a bit of a different pace and flow as you used longer lines. I realize the form does not call for any specific rhythm. I just noticed that the flow was not similar to the first verse. I do not know if coherence with each verse is a requirement even though no direct format is needed. I appreciate the effort it took to get the theme and form flowing together!  It was fun to read and study. Thanks for sharing your vision and love of bowling!  Write on as you Party!  eyestar ~~Image ID# 2053393's Content Rating Exceeds Item Content Rating~~ "Invalid Item"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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