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*Laugh* Who would think to make a poem about commas? *Salute* Your choice of image is brilliant as commas truly are inexplicably....demons. LOL I am not sure of all the rules as I have seen some uses I wouldn't have guessed and likely put some where they are not to be now.
When I read your poem I was puzzled by the semi colon in verse 2 for example. I would have used a comma after "devils" and "rules" as the middle sentence seems to be a phrase between the first line subject and the predicate beginning with "can". *Confused**Smile*

I enjoyed reading this comical little poem aloud as it flowed and rhymed well. It had a light tone and expressed both the trouble making quality of commas yet the pride when one has them mastered.*Thumbsup* The "d" sound in verse 2 line one is cool though "dastardly" is a mouthful. It does fit the bill and humorous vibe.*Laugh* I also like "control the comma" and the alliterative words in verse 3. Well done!

I wanted to read "they're" in the second line to keep pace with the rest, but it is may be just a personal thing.*Wink*

I had fun with your vision of the comma! Thanks for sharing your craft and sense of humour!*Starstruck*

Keep on doing what you do to make this WDC shine brighter! *Star* Have fun at the Party!

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