Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

What I like: Wow! Great action that reads like the opening to a James Bond movie.

Opening: The first paragraph sets the scene very well. The reader is captured right away and held captive until the very end.

Plot: the plot is well set up and developed to the end.

Style and Voice: a fast paced style.

Scene/Setting: the scene is well established. Well done.

Dialogue: good dialogue that advances the story.

Characters: the main character is very well done.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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