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 Never Hide Open in new Window. [E]
A poem I wrote in Creative Writing Class.
by Wendolyn Author Icon
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Review by ~ Aqua ~ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Wendolyn Author Icon! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

I found your poems in the list of the smallest poems written and I couldn't help but come over and read the poem. The title of your poem really captured my attention because it felt very inspiring and motivating and these are one of my favourite genres. The the first line of your poem increases the curiosity of the reader because I liked the different wording, it seemed very scientific. The dialogue you have written is good because it gives reader a glimpse of you, the poet, in the poem. You are a person who doesn't start a fight or are not the first to say something bad, instead, you retaliate, you fight back when someone startles you. You are patient and peaceful as long as no one comes at you. The poem is quite different from what I had interpreted from the title of your poem. the title of your poem made me think that it would be a poem which would be more the inspirational way, as to that you shouldn't hide no matter how you are, what you look like, what you wear, how you talk etc because it doesn't define you and no one has the right to say anything to you. However, the only thing related to this theme in your poem was the 'fight to live' as to not hide, go out, explore the world, the opportunities available etc. There were no errors that I could find in your work however, I have a suggestion. I think that when you wrote this poem, your mind and ideas were scattered and you couldn't get them on page in correct order, it seems haphazard. Otherwise, good attempt.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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