Hi, Siobhan Falen ,

Today I am reviewing "Invalid Item"  as part of the contest

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General impressions:

This was a well written story and it fits in nicely with the prompt that was set.

The story has a smooth flow to it. The smattering of dialogue is punctuated correctly and it adds to the atmosphere of the story

You have done a great job with the woman at the bus stop and how she reacts to her perceptions of the man.

Favourite quotes:


I like this choice of phrase here as it helps to reinforce what has happened to the man and his family.



The simplest act of kindness seems like such a big thing in the depths of his despair. With the evil that has befallen him, he is surprised to find someone in the real world can be capable of sympathy.

Closing remarks:

Congratulations on making it to the end of I Write Siobhan!

Thanks for sharing this item! Please keep on writing and best of luck in the contest!

Andy~hating university

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