Hi MontyB , I found your flash fiction story on the I-write page and I'm here to review it, as the rules state. I hope you'll find some of my suggestions useful.

What I liked:
You managed to alarm me, very well! I didn't actually look at the genre until after reading, but my first reaction was "oh my! "
This was an alarming piece, but definitely not too scary. You managed to shock and startle me, but it wasn't to a point where I would be scarred.
The ending was completely unexpected, but well done. It didn't seem awkward, but it definitely was not what I would have imagined to happen.

Some things I noticed:
They alternated between swinging and gossiping about the kids in their class. Make sure you have parallel structure here- so instead of saying "I like to eat or play computer games", it would be "I like to eat food or play computer games"
          Also, why can't they gossip and swing at the same time?
You put ""He's my grandfather and he's come to take me home." Kenzie's voice was strange." into a new paragraph, even though the previous paragraph was already Kenzie talking to Melinda.
          was this on purpose? That last part really confused me, and I had to re-read it multiple times to figure out why I was lost.
Her heart pounded as she watched her argue with the air around the slide. The first "her" refers to one girl, but the second "her" refers to another girl, even though the second girl isn't mentioned in between. Maybe add "friend" after it, so it won't be as confusing.
This is more of a stylistic/personal choice, but for the last sentence, since you only mention one man throughout the whole story, I would change the "an elderly man" to "the elderly man".


Overall, I actually enjoyed this story-even though horror scares me.
This was well-written and an enjoyable read- the only real issue I had was the double Kenzie part. Good job and keep writing!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .