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 | Expressions create lasting impressions  [E] Youth at a beach attracted by a young damsel sweet memories that create lasting impression  |
| Hi Walts   Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" It's been pleasure to review your "Expressions create lasting impressions" on behalf of The Simply Positive Group. Please be reminded that my review is based on one person's opinion and you have all rights to choose if you like it or not. So please feel free to use if you find something interesting or just ignore if you don't like something. Why I chose to review your story?Hello there. As I came into conversation about writing with you I'm here to share my thoughts about your story. I'm doing this first as a friend to friend and second from the aspect of one writer to another. I hope my thoughts will inspire you for the future or, if not, please forget whatever I say in my review. This is just one person's opinion. First impression/Plot?As I started to read it I must say that I really love the way you are writing and creating words to describe the environment and surrounding. I love when writer pay attention to details in his story and you're doing it far so good. It's a lovely short, romantic story about two people that never met again. I could totally imagine that morning at the beach and feel the fresh air and waves as Wesley started to swim in the ocean. This story reminds me on one teen magazine that I used to buy when I was younger. In that magazine they had one column where someone wrote Summer Tales. It's just like that. In my country we have four seasons and summer is known as one of the season created just for the lovers. Some summer loves have happy ending, some of them are sad but we remember every single one of them as we go through life. I'm sure in your story Wesley and Waverly will remember each other as well. My suggestion?I noticed that you uploaded your story from the computer, which is fine. The thing is, when you're uploading your document, sometimes some writing tools don't appear here as they are written in Word. In your case I found lots of ( â ). I guess here you are missing quotation marks ( " ). I don't have any other suggestion except this one. In the right upper corner of your story you will notice item tools, just click on it and go to edit item. Once when you are there replace â with proper sign and when you are done scroll down, click on save and view and you are done. In item tools you will notice also spell check and word count. That is good for you if you're attempting to enter some contest here. I hope this helps. Final thought?I liked your story. It's sweet and very well described. You are doing it very well and I hope you will continue to write. Good luck with exploring Writing.com and also exploring yourself here. Who knows, maybe you become even more better than you think you are now. Welcome to WdC one more time and I hope you will enjoy in your stay here. ~Minja~ "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" {check out my contest "Jane Austen Contest "  Be courageous and try to write in a way that scares you a little  
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You responded to this review 01/31/2015 @ 1:20pm EST