Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

How I found your piece...you are mynemesisfriend you you had the winning bid for my review package

First impressions...I liked it and loved the fact that you included the image. Your imagery was wondeerful but the image really tied everything together.

Was the title interesting...yes. I would have read this even if you hadn't suggested it for me

Was the content rating appropriate...yes, nothing above an 'e' in it

Did you use a specific form of poetry...yes, Roundel (thank you for putting a link to it, that really helps when I am reviewing unfamiliar forms)

Did you follow the form...yes, 11 lines, 2 quatrains and a triplet and the rhymes were correct

Was there a rhyme scheme- what was it...two rhymes only with the second rhyme rhyming with the refrain.

Did the rhymes seem forced...none of the rhymes were forced, you picked your words carefully. (as always)

Were words forced to fit syllable count...n/a

Was there rhythm and flow...yes, the use of the rhymes, alliteration, and assonance gave the piece wonderful flow and rhythm. Great job!

Any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation...I wonder, should there be a comma between 'by' and 'as' in the seventh line? When I read the poem aloud I wanted to pause there and the line seemed cumbersome as written.

Things I would change...just that comma

Favorite parts/lines...

Is this a warning predicted by tears,

with this line I could picture God crying over what we have done with His creation

Another wonderful job!


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