Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

How I found your piece...this is the second of three reviews you received for your bid

First impressions...This is a rather heavy piece. I like it! I have my ideas on what it means and I have a feeling you have your ideas and someone else could disagree with both of us. It is that kind of poem...Great!

Was the title interesting...Yes! and I also like the intro

Was the content rating appropriate...I would say so... it might have been 13+ as well

Did you use a specific form of poetry...not that I noted

Did you follow the form...n/a

Was there a rhyme scheme- what was it...no

Did the rhymes seem forced...n/a

Were words forced to fit syllable count...there was a consistent syllable count but I don't feel that anything was forced to fit. I did enjoy the poem as abstract as is it.

Was there rhythm and flow...yes, your use of the consistent syllable counts and alliteration lend themselves well to the flow and rhythm of the piece. I think you did a wonderful job with the piece and I would love to discuss it's meaning with you if you would feel so inclined.

Any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation...none noted

Things I would change...I would not change a thing in your piece EXCELLENT

Favorite parts/lines...
My favorite lines were these;

Craven reflection
Soliciting payment
Entrusted trespass
Designating favorites

You did a wonderful job with your poem and I love the fact that different readers will have different interpretations. Many of my poems are too obvious!

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