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Hello there, Newbie! Welcome to WDC. *Snow3*
This is a Simply Positive Review.

*Clip* I could feel the sadness in your poem. You really pull the reader into the raw emotions of feeling used by another in a relationship, when one thought things were going along on the right track.

Sometimes people enter relationships for many different reasons -- love not being their prime reason. If it is a one-sided attraction, it never works out well for the one who had hopes of the relationship growing. *Magnify*

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*Note0* I would suggest more punctuation use rather than just commas, for more impact and a smoother read.


"I can no longer bare to think," bear

*Flagb* Otherwise, the poem rhymed well and packed a big story about love lost.

Well done! *Bookopen*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch




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