Awesome. Wow! The scene is inspiring. The events taking place epic. The nature around us, showing, leading, teaching us. Form and structure are adequate. Flow is a bit stilted as the line breaks are a bit off. Pace is slow but the gist of the poem is clear. No visible spelling snafus are apparent, One suggestion for improvement is to complete your thought in each line. Example: Lines 10 and 11 are difficult to read as presented. Overall impression: the message is received and thanks for the touching way in which you presented it. Write on! Copenator out! BA, M Div ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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