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Hello, spoo952. My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to the site with a review today. If you have any questions or need help navigating the site, feel free to email me. Keep in mind that the following is just one reader's opinion. I am not a professional and you know your writing best. If you find something helpful here, use it. If you don't, feel free to disregard this review completely. *Peace2*

*Beakerr* General Impressions: This is a simple, yet effective poem about the loneliness of a tree. We see life through the tree's perspective as it knows it will eventually be cut down or whither away. In the meantime, it doesn't feel as though it is truly appreciated as a piece of nature.

*Beakerb* Best Parts: I like the general idea behind the poem and it was cool to read through the tree's perspective. I like the repetition of the line "I am but a lonely tree" in the first and last line. It was interested to read all the different ways the tree feels as though it is alone.

My favorite lines were,
I can't expect them to protect me forever
from greedy fingers and selfish hearts

*Beakero* Possible Suggestions: I feel like the poem is lacking a bit in emotional depth and imagery at this point. It has a good base, but I didn't feel the emotional impact I assumed would be there considering the emotional nature of the tree's plea. I think this might be caused by the casual language used in some parts. When you start lines with And or But as you know... it takes away from the straightforward and emotional tone, in my opinion.

*Beakerv* Summary: Overall, I think you did a good job of building a poem based on a lonely tree. I think there are some parts that could use more expressive or emotional language. Thanks again for sharing with us!

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