}Review number #4 of week November 6-12th 2014

Hi Jaya,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Cheated

First Impression: I felt sad that the author feels everyone cheats. That is very sad to me. I hope the author meets some one special and realizes that not every one exploits another.

What I liked: Love in all walks of life process, yes, love that is betrayed does not distinguish by class or money.

What needs your attention: at least until caught in red hand, this line does not flow smoothly when I read it out loud.

Favorite Parts: Cheated one's lives are ruined, reminded me how fragile relationships can be and when one person does not place the same value on it. It is a sad reality.

Overall Impression: I feel with a couple tweaks this poem could reach its full potential.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .