}Review number # 2 of week November 6-12th, 2014

Hi Chris,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Nightstalkers:Lonewolf

First Impression: Curious, I didn't what style of writing I would find. I am glad I visited.

What I liked: Logan sounds like he has his hands full with the Nightstalkers, I feel they have taken his parents and maybe the woman he loves. My curiosity is peaked.

What needs your attention: IN the 5th paragraph, I believe self fish is one word spelled selfish. After learning Logan was in love with a beautiful woman I believe you wanted to say he loved his job not lived his job. Then he there is a extra d after the word found. If mankind knew just how close in the next paragraph I believe needs a comma after it. I pause when I read there. In the next sentence Nightstalkers is misspelled.

Favorite Parts: Logan in the alley, reminiscing about six months prior to that night. It helped me understand why he was worried about being seen.

Overall Impression: I see from the last sentence that this is not finished yet. I am curious and hope that it does become a finished product. I was not disappointed by what I have read thus far.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .