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Hi JDON Author Icon,

I see that this is a short chapter about Henry. It looked like am epilogue to me at first but as I read I figured that it's Henry's side of the story. He happened to be trapped in a house. Even after kicking the door open, all he saw that it was sealed with. I hope I have interpreted that part correctly.

One contradicting aspect I found was that he could tel that the sun was shining because there was a window. Then, at the end of the chapter, there's this line: when Henry looked back to where the house should have been all he saw was a cement dome with no apparent doors or windows. So does this mean that he was imagining that there was a window and in the actual sense there was nothing like that. Was he going through trauma or some kind of disturabance after his father's death? You could expand a bit on this chapter. This could make his character come out clearly, perhaps as one who is so affected by the loss of his father.

Another suggestion is that you find different ways of beginning the sentences. Also check on sentence structure, grammar and punctuation.

I hope my suggestions have be of help. If you have any questions, feel free to email me.

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