}Review number # 5 of week October 23-29, 2014

Hi Brittany

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Dark Confessions

First Impression: I felt drawn into something unknown and wondered where it was taking me, did I dare to go.

What I liked: How each stanza builds and creates a feeling of fear, well done.

What needs your attention: Two things, in the first stanza I would change should to would. Should just doesn't sound right when it is read out loud. It may be just me but give it a try.

I am fan of centering poems, it speaks to me of the author's confidence in their writing that they feel it is strong enough to jump off the page to the reader. Just food for thought.

Favorite Parts: Then crazed he will snuff you out. That stanza really emphasizes the unknown evil lurking. Great images created from the beginning to the end.

Overall Impression: You said, this is not your typical genre but you have done an excellent job with it. The poem flows very well. In my opinion, you rocked it.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .