}Review number # 3 of week October 23rd-29th, 2014

Hi CJ

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: I'd Be

First Impression: Interesting take from a child's point of view. Yes, it is hard to decide what to be. Even grown-ups struggle with that at different points in their lives.

What I liked: I love my cheese and long skinny tail. I could just see Dad's big feet narrowly missing the small mouse on the floor. That had to be frightening for the mouse.

What needs your attention: Normally, I suggest centering the poem but with this along the side, it reminds me of the vulnerability of a child. Though I would recommend putting the title in the box with the poem and putting the description under the poem it is distracting.

Favorite Parts: The tigers energy, his wanting to go out to play and finding the confinement disappointing. Sadly, life is filled with many of them. It just means we pick ourselves and begin again. The little boy in your poem did, he chose to be himself again. You can do the same thing CJ, and work harder and you will get there. Rome was not won in a day. Nor was Egypt built in a day.

Overall Impression: Very well done, does not deserve to be hidden in your folder without recognition.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




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