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Don't Look Back
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A Muse Masters Poetry Review
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot. *Angel*


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Saying goodbye is just so difficult. And no one is ready to say goodbye but in the end, people leave. I totally agree with the theme of your poem, don't look back, look forward to tomorrow because yesterday was yesterday and it has gone now. The way you provided the message of your poem was good and I felt that the message was delivered spot on! I really like this theme and I am also fond of reading life and inspiration poem.

The flow of the poem was smooth on reading it out loud. I liked the poetic devices used in your poem.There are a lot of things mentioned in your poem that has a deeper meaning that it lets on. So if you could, I would love to see them expanded, each separately presented *Smile* There are times in life when you just want to leave everything behind, go away, forget about all the pain and bad things in life, but then again they are part of life and we have to face them. I like that you suggest a negative thought but then go against it by providing the inspirational part, the good part. For example, in the first and second, you expressed negative and depressing thoughts but then you covered them up by saying that all of our things that have not yet been said would not be told.

The last stanza was my favourite because it talks about moving on and looking forward to tomorrow when any action of ours could make a difference *Smile* Amazing ending!

I'll start here making it right
A clean slate for a new day
Yesterday, I was defeated
But, then again, that was yesterday

The only thing I would suggest for improvement is to change the title. Maybe something like there's always tomorrow, live another day etc *Smile*

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