Hi debby4fm.
My name is Carly and I am doing this review on behalf of "Invalid Item"  and WDC Senior Mod Contest.
I have just read your short piece "Invalid Item" , which I found when looking for another Newbie to read to meet the demands of my only contest and wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. Feel free to use or disregard any or all of my advice.


Overall Impressions:
Your piece is short and sweet. I like the message. It brought a smile to my face. Thank you for that.


Form:
You have your piece listed as fiction, but I would lean towards poetic prose. It is not really a story. More like a road map or tackle box for a good life.


Favourite Part:
I love the essence of your piece.

I enjoy how you power through the piece with a pattern of 'you will have... called ___' - for example, "But you have a spare called determination."

I love the spiritual aspect of the piece. It resonates with my own ideas of life.


Suggestions:
What is a 'jods'? Is that supposed to be jobs?


Additional Comments:
I enjoyed this piece. Would love to read more. I would say keep writing and don't be afraid to try you hand at poetry or prose. I see potential.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .