I found this piece on the "read a Newbie" page and am reviewing it for the Sen Mod Birthday Challenge.

I'm not sure what your prompt was or what contest this was for but it made me grin. You've managed to create a story with very few words, however, it has all the elements it needs - action, setting, characters, dialog, and a twist. It makes me wonder where the flying saucer came from and why it has landed where it is.

I would have liked to see a little more detail about environment (inside, outside, a football field, a forest, ???). I also think you should name the teacher. Nameless characters are hard to connect with.

But overall, this is fun and well written.

Happy writing,
Cobe

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .