Hi MontyB .
My name is Carly and I am doing this review on behalf of "Invalid Item"  and the WDC Senior Mod Contest.
I have just read your poem "Invalid Item" , which I found when looking for a Newbie in the PDG navigation classroom and wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. Feel free to use or disregard any or all my advice.


Overall Impressions:
I see from the three underlined words that this poem was probably written for the Birthday Poetry contest which I am also taking part in and enjoying. I am glad to know you are up for the challenge. I love the story your poem tells. You did an excellent incorporating the prompt words and weaving them into the poem.


Characters:
An irascible old man - a magician
A wood nymph

Form:
The rhyming pattern follows that the first and third lines rhyme. This pattern holds throughout all 6 stanzas.
You keep to six beats each line for the first stanza. This pattern does not continue into the next stanza. The third stanza returns to it. It does not take away from the reading. It seems to work.


Plot:
Though this is a poem it tells a tale of a man who wishes to use magic to immortalize his brain. He is warned by a wood nymph who he swats away and finds himself with a tragic result - chanting as his mind is lost. A tale well told.


Favourite Part:
I love the wood nymph's warning:

""All living things do die."
The wood nymph whispered clear.
"Leave me, foul beast," said he,
and swatted at his ear."

I love the story that is told. The warning to be careful with magic foreshadows and intrigues. I was drawn into the tale.

Suggestions:
I see no issues with spelling or grammar.


Additional Comments:
Good luck in the contest. I wish you luck in being able to write 14 poems in 14 days - don't give up.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .