Hi Beautiful Candy .
My name is Carly and I am doing this review on behalf of "Invalid Item"  and the WDC Birthday Senior Mod. Contest.
I have just read your poem "Tall Man" , which I found when checking out the Newbie section of the PDG and wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion.


Overall Impressions:
Intriguing as you are drawn in - from the smile to the frown. I wondered where it was going, but then found a sweetness to it. It was your hope... where later it became your reality.... or so the poet hopes. Dreams coming alive.


Characters:
The poet and a dream man - who is tall with broad shoulders, strong arms, a firm back that supports everything - who "could show the world to me."
Your description is pure, yet just evasive enough to be open.
Later, in the poem, you know who this tall man is.


Form:
I am not sure what the form is but I like it.
The first stanza has a rhyming pattern of a.b.a.b.c.d.
It is followed by two unrhyming lines.
The third stanza has no rhyming pattern - but the description is solid.
Fourth stanza has the first and last line rhyming with the other four lines body parts - grin, hair, teeth, lips.
Another two unrhyming lines.
The next stanza echos the first with some minor changes but the rhyming pattern holds as a.b.a.b.c.d.
The last two lines echo the second two.


Techniques:
The tallness of the poem reflects the content.
You use emjambment which lets one line blend into the next - it adds to the flow of the poem. 'His back is firm supports everything.'


Favourite Part:
I loved the echoed stanzas of the first two and the last two. From dream to reality.


Suggestions:
I see no spelling or grammar issues.
This line is a little awkward to me..."A tall man indeed who could show the word to little me." The awkardness falls within the last half - I keep wanting to say 'little ol' me' What if you altered it to 'who could show the world to me.' Would it work to just drop the 'little'?


Additional Comments:
I really liked this poem. There is a lot of potential in this. Not sure if you are taking advantage of some of the birthday poetry contests but I would say go for it. Try this one - "Invalid Item" . Good Luck and definitely keep writing.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .