Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: This is a fun story. There are two scenes: work and home that have a realistic feel to it. The pace is quick and easy to read.

Characterization: Valentina tells the story in a manner that brings the reader into it. The interaction with other characters is well done.

Dialogue: I like the dialogue, and it advances the story.

Twists and turns: I like the surprise at the end.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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