Good Day victoria31 ~LifeLessons~ here to review you poem during the celebration of the 14th anniversary of the site!!


I have tried my hand at the Petrarchan sonnet myself and it is a challenge so I wanted to see what your muse has shown you.

So let's recap

The first eight lines consist of octave and rhymes.
The remaining six lines a sestet

A change from one rhyme group to another signifies change in the subject matter.

Usually an iambic pentameter but there is some give to that one.
Line nine changes and becomes the volta line. This can be done gracefully without great notice but takes practice.



A beautiful description of the Morning and the casting light that allows us all to enjoy. I enjoyed your waves to goodnight as morning brings the beautiful show.
Your words are soothing and I can picture myself sitting outside watching with a fresh cup of java!! I love the morning. It is one of my favorite times of day along side with the sun setting. You portrayed a great image for me to sit back and inhale welcome of a new day!
Thank you for that. It has been raining here for a week and I sure miss that sun!



You use a great rhyming scheme here with a lovely flow of words. It read easily from one line to the next.

Your syllable count is great. On spot with no hesitations. Great job!
I enjoyed your volta line, as you snuck it in there without changing the tune of the poem.

I notice some great uses of consonance through out the whole poem.
example:
Morning's glory is quite a sight


There both masculine and feminine sounds here but they flow well together.



My only suggestion would be in punctuation.

Painting colors high in the air.
Morning's glory is quite a sight
Its glory is pleasant to share
When God exhales the morning bright.


I would change the period in the beginning to a comma

Maybe

Painting colors high in the air,
morning's glory is quite a sight.
It's glory is pleasant to share,
when God exhales the morning bright.

Punctuation is also used to help your poetry flow for the readers ear.
Reading out loud to yourself will help have a feel for the sound yourself.


I really enjoyed this poem and I am glad you had a chance to test your talents with this new form. There are so many forms of poetry and none are easy but you have a great talent here to spread your wings. Thank you so much for sharing.

~LL~










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