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 Life Open in new Window. [E]
Life is what you make it, but life doesn't always turn out the way you want it to.
by Care Author Icon
Review of Life  Open in new Window.
Review by Shubham Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello Care!

This poem ANYONE would be able to relate to! ;)
You've written it well, but it doesn't flow smoothly. Many of your lines are too long which breaks the flow.
I like the content of the poem but maybe you can just make these few corrections and it'll work out great for you!

Keep writing, and I'll keep writing,
Shubham
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