Hello Svn2!

I like your poem a lot! It flows fast and makes complete sense to me!
Just consider these suggestions and your poem will be great.
1. There is a little flow break during the lines :
"Fall to your knees
And wonder just a little bit"

2. You've used punctuation in your whole poem except for the last stanza. Make sure you add them, because that way you can get the reader to read the poem exactly the way you do to yourself.

3. There is a small typo in the first stanza, second line :
It should be breathe and not breath.

Overall the poem is nice and a few small fixes will make it better!

Keep writing, and I'll keep reviewing,
Shubham