Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: I enjoyed this story very much. The descriptive details bring this story to life. The interaction between the characters makes it fun. The style is easy to read.

Characterization: A chocolate shop owner tells the story, which begins with the entrance of Tim and Abby. The reader is brought into the story quickly on this fun ride to the end. Delightful banter in the conversation, which is so natural.

Dialogue: I love the dialogue. It advances the story well.

Twists and turns: The unusual candy is a great story idea.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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