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 Uprising Open in new Window. [E]
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Review by Paul D Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: This story of a rebellion builds slowly to an explosive end. The story details helps the reader get a feel for the setting and the mood. The style is easy to read.

Characterization: Mr. Orion tells the story. The conflict and mood is well conveyed in the interaction with Jarek Deacon.

Dialogue: The dialogue is good and advances the story. Some of the longer passages could be broken up with a look at the listeners reactions.

Twists and turns: Jarek Deacon violent response was a surprise.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes



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