Hi bst,
This is a fantastic poem. I think you should write poetry. The tone is informal and gets all the reader's attention. The reader hopes that the reader finds what they want to do. This poem delights the reader. The rhyme is wonderful and gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The poem flows extremely well and is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from the poem. Great job.